[RELEASE] 4.2.0 announcements and preliminary tarballs

[Matt Thompson]

Benedikt Meurer wrote:
> Hello everybody,
> 
> I'd like to invite everybody to help in improving the release 
> announcements (esp. native english speakers to check the texts). In 
> addition, we are looking for people to translate the release 
> announcements into different languages, atleast the "short announcement" 
> (Part I) and the "website announcement" (Part II).

Well, I see a few things that I might change, text-wise.  First, "easy
to use and platform independent" to "easy-to-use and
platform-independent".  Some English majors might want to check that for
me, but that's how this chemist would write it.  Another hyphenate I
often use is bleeding-edge, but that is not always done.  (There are a
few other "easy-to-use" as well that adjectives in II.)

Next: "If you want to try Xfce 4.2.0 first, without necessarily
installing it on your system..."  I'm not sure the "necessarily" needs
to be there, yet I see what you are getting at with it.  Permanently?
Hmm...

In the "II. Website announcement", I'm wondering about "keyboard
shortcuts and a graphical desktop menu editor".  Are you wanting to
point out that it has keyboard shortcuts or an editor for keyboard
shortcuts?  I can kind of read it either way, but it depends on what you
want to emphasize.

In re: "Huge progress has been made in the area of internationalization,
and so Xfce 4.2.0 is now available in about 41 different languages,
thanks to the impressive work of our translators."  I think you can get
rid of the "so" and then either "Xfce 4.2.0 is now" or "now Xfce 4.2.0
is" would sound better.  Which of those is better I suppose depends on
how much emphasis to give to "now".

All this said, I am just a chemist, so my English is often not the best. 
  Corrections to my "corrections" are probably needed.

Matt

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